Haha, this is so spot on. I'm revising my own manuscript and will now pay attention to finding these collocated clichés. Side note: can we banish "looking up through eyelashes"? Short of being Jessica Rabbit, most mere mortals cannot, in fact, look THROUGH their eyelashes. I've tried and I look instead like I'm having a stroke. Profusely.
I liked this read a lot, reminds me of the fanfiction girlies saying “his aquamarine orbs” instead of “blue eyes” lol. No need to reinvent the wheel here
This is such a great example of this phenomena. I feel like when you’re young and new to writing you’re intent on breaking every collocation you can think of. But the most enthralling writing learns that balance you mention.
I really get it because you want to be fresh and engaging but it’s easy to end up distracting readers from the actual meat of what you’re t tu ing to say!
I love how specific this is!! I think because English is my second language, that phrase has always stood out to me, for reasons I can't really explain?
For the love of god(s) please be niche and boring.
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Haha, this is so spot on. I'm revising my own manuscript and will now pay attention to finding these collocated clichés. Side note: can we banish "looking up through eyelashes"? Short of being Jessica Rabbit, most mere mortals cannot, in fact, look THROUGH their eyelashes. I've tried and I look instead like I'm having a stroke. Profusely.
To be fair if I had eyelashes long enough to look through I would be doing it 24/7! Best of luck with your revisions! x
this made me snort with laughter lol
Thanks for reading!! 🩷
I liked this read a lot, reminds me of the fanfiction girlies saying “his aquamarine orbs” instead of “blue eyes” lol. No need to reinvent the wheel here
That and letting out a breath they didn’t know they were holding!
This is such a great example of this phenomena. I feel like when you’re young and new to writing you’re intent on breaking every collocation you can think of. But the most enthralling writing learns that balance you mention.
I really get it because you want to be fresh and engaging but it’s easy to end up distracting readers from the actual meat of what you’re t tu ing to say!
I love to read these posts with such eloquence and subtle humour. Great work
What a lovely comment!! Thanks so much for reading! 🥹
I love how specific this is!! I think because English is my second language, that phrase has always stood out to me, for reasons I can't really explain?
Makes me curious about the popular ones in other languages :o
The billionaire sweated profusely as he peeled off his shirt. He had been working out at the gym, and it showed!